Poet
I only post a few of my own poems here, simply because many of them are being sent hither and yon in hopes that some editor will have a weak moment and accept one for publication. Word on the street is that poems that can be found in Google searches are often considered “previously published.” But I’ll give you a few links. Sometimes I will post one that I am working on if I am looking for some feedback or wanting to gage and audience’s reaction. But I will take them down shortly after and hope that Google deletes them from their cache before they end up on a publisher’s desk for consideration.
I will however share a couple with you that were published in college journals some time back, like the one below which won the Savage Poetry Prize from Bloomsburg University and the Academy of American Poets, and was published in Bloom’s faculty journal, Carver. You can read the old moon poem to which it refers by clicking here. Another was recently posted during National Poetry Month here. And I also read one of my own during my 30 Days, 30 Readings here.
Overvision
I wrote a poem once
about my neighbors and the moon.
Each brief line dropped
into place as I let them break
at their will. The syntax
arranged itself just comfortably
so. Years later
I came back with more
education and a better sense
of rhythm. I thought
I could improve
it; make the lines
more powerful,
the innuendos more profound.
But the new ink
was too dark for the old page,
and my good intentions discolored
the moon. I’d awakened
a befuddled old man
and his angry, fuzzy-
slippered wife (I’d forgotten
that my old neighbors had moved
away long ago).
They wanted to know
what the hell was going
on—who was I? And
what had I done to the sky?
Too late almost to save
it, I took whiteout
to the street (the last
bottle on the shelf
at the all-night mini
mart on that same block),
dimmed the stars
and ushered back to bed
the little man and his grumbling
wife. That globe of blood
still had a pulse—
thank heaven, and I let it return
to where it had been;
on page one
of a college literary
magazine simple
and perfect,
hanging low there
in that early night sky.


Hmmm.. intriguing..I like intriguing.. intriguing leads to thought and thought leads to learning….learning leads to acceptance..and acceptance to equality..hmm yes..you I like.
Thank you so much for your comments, Nectarfizz. Can I call you Fizz, or Nectar or just Nect? Seriously, I appreciate your taking the time to read all of this.
Post online with a different title and altered first few lines and (of course) ficticious screen name.
And remember, old cowboys can be every bit as bad as teenagers. That’s a fact that is.
c.
Hmmm? Why is my gravatar and amoeba with legs? Go figure.
Well, thanks for having the patience to follow me this far! lol I haven’t blogged much lately as you can see. It’s been a rough year, a busy semester, new job, back to school, dead cerebral cortex, you name it! I read the looking for sonofwalt pieces and was going to respond, but… my screen stayed blank for some reason.
Hey, just wondering how the Dad Poet’s doing. It was cool connecting with you during the NaPoWriMo last year. Hope all is well with you, your boys, and everyone else in your world. Keep writing, stay strong, and have a good year. ~Peace~
Thanks, Daniel! I’m doing fine. I haven’t posted anything since Christmas. New semester starred. COLD here in Pennsylvania, and I think after all these years I have either become, or must admit to having always been, one of those folks whose moods turn dark in the lightness cold of January.
Big and happy plans ahead and the clan here are doing great though. I loved your recent peice/peices on the bus, jail/chapel. Great blend of prose and poem.
I really enjoyed reading this, particularly: ‘the new ink was too dark for the old page’ great line!
Thank you, poetart! I really enjoyed your blog, and am honored that you found these pages and lines worth taking the time to read. Your spirit comes through in your written voice, and it inspires me.
I do need to edit this. Perhaps I should mention “Moon Watcher” was winner of the Savage Poetry Award from the American Academy of Poets and Bloomsburg University, and that it was published in Carver, the faculty journal for Bloom U.
Dadpoet, thank you so much for the “like” on my poetry post. It looks like we share similar preoccupations: literary writing, theology, attempting to reconcile sacred text with what we know in our hearts to be true of our lives.
Your poem “Overvision” is magical. I love the concept of altering reality by re-writing an older poem!
I sincerely look forward to exploring further into the pages of your blog. Thanks for leading me here, and cheers!
What a delightful comment, Jennifer. Thank you! I’m very fond of Overvision. It’s one of those poems that grows up like a child, and comes alive on its own terms. I’m really glad you enjoyed it. It’s good to cyber-meet you.
And to you as well! Thanks, too, for following. Back at you… I want to keep up with what you’re working on.
I like your two poems here. The writing is strong and playful. Do you not often publish your own poems on your blog? I’d like to read more…
PS thanks for visiting my blog.
I don’t post too many of them here, no. Though April 5th was one of my own pieces put to video too. After deciding what I am submitting where next I’ll post a few more here. “Cleaving” is another one of mine that we rendered to video in late March.
Oh, and you are welcome! I enjoyed my visit and will be back. Love those dad moments. I can relate.
very nice work. and nice priorities. thank you for visiting my page – i look forward to many more visits to yours
Thank you so much! I really appreciate that. I enjoyed my visit and will be back. Thanks for stopping in, and for your kind comments.
Thanks, N! I enjoyed the visit, and I will be back!
I liked it so much I guess I replied twice…. um… three times if you count now. Does now count?
Thanks a lot. Really. Glad there’s dad’s poets children and we keep on
I belong to a poetry forum, called Blueline/goobertree.com. we post a poem a day for 30 days. I’m working on my 24th round of thirty. the poems keep getting better and the practice and the commenting keep both me and my writing sharp. You have a great poetic voice-keep writing!
Thank you kindly! I appreciate it. I will be over to read at your place (your blog) after I get some sleep. Thanks for stopping in!
no problem–aloha!
I truly enjoyed this. Sometimes you just aren’t meant to change what was written. This piece speaks of that beautifully.
Thank you so much for that comment! I am not against editing or revision, but I am too prone to what I’ve called “over-vision.” There is such a thing as too much, isn’t there?
Thank you for visiting!